An Unlikely Friend: Week 11 Story

Moving is such a pain. Ian thought as he lifted yet another heavy box from the back of his pick up truck. He had just graduated college and decided that it was time to try a new city in a new town. He had already met a few of his neighbors and they all seemed really nice. After a few hours of unpacking he decided he would carry on tomorrow and went to bed. THUMP! Ian jolted out of bed at the loud sound in the bed. He shuffled out of bed quickly and grabbed the nearest weapon that he could see. He went to see what the commotion was. He searched everywhere in the house but could not seem to find anything. He stepped into his backyard and saw a wild dog. He was relieved, especially since the only weapon he was holding was his shoe. The dog snarled at him when he tried to approach. Ian noticed that not only was the dog a little frail but it seemed to be protecting something. The moment Ian took another step towards the dog it snarled even louder but he could make out two little pups. It seems the dogs had been camping out back here since the owners had moved out. Ian had always wanted a pet but his parents always told him no. Ian had an idea to help out the young dog and the pups. He left them and went straight to the 24 hour grocery store and picked up anything he could that he thought a few dogs would need. The first thing he did when he got back was lay out some food for the dog. He stayed at a safe distance and made sure not to get to close. He went back inside and waited for the dog to go to the food. The dog after 5 or so minutes went and inspected the bowl and slowly ate. The young pups followed suit. Ian did this over the course of 10 days and each time he decided to do some action to make him come closer to the dog. The pups warmed up to Ian quickly but every time they tried to leave their mother’s side she snarled and they came whimpering back to her. On the 11th day Ian decided that he would put the food bowls in the house he feed them at regular times and it sort of became a routine. He often left toys out and found that the young pups had each taken a liken to some toys. He set the food bowls in site of the dogs but inside of the house. He knew it was a risk but he had been so kind and over the last few days he had noticed the mother had warmed up to him. Ian could tell the mother was hesitant but the young pups ran inside immediately. Ian was surprised when the mother didn’t bark at the pups but allowed them to run free and eat. She slowly inched her way in to the house. Ian knew that it wouldn’t be easy but he had definitely gained her trust.
Source:Scared Dog


Authors Note: I got this story from when Krishna was taming the bull and it reminded me of a rabid dog. I am allergic to dogs so I never really try to interact with them. I let the story end this way because it felt like the right place to end it. Overall, I am not a fan of this story but I hope you can see the picture I was trying to create.
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Comments

  1. Hey Dacia!

    I laughed when you mentioned the weapon was a shoe. When you said "grab the nearest weapon" i was thinking to myself, how many weapons does this guy have in his room? Was he some sword collector or something? But you brought it together with the shoe. I enjoyed the modern take and I think you should enjoy it, cause it is good.

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  2. Hi Dacia!
    I think you did a good job telling this story in a way that is relatable to a lot of people. Although you can’t interact with dogs (which breaks my heart for you), almost anyone knows the mannerisms of rabid dogs and how skittish they are. You really explained in detail the process the main character went through to earn the trust of the mother and her pups. Great job!

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  3. Hi, Dacia! I really enjoyed reading your story! I especially enjoyed your use of onomatopoeia! Putting it in all caps really emphasized the sound and added a nice touch to the story! I think you do a really great job of telling the story clearly. My one suggestions is maybe you could try playing with some longer sentences? It might just add a new flow to the story. Great job!

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  4. Dacia, what a touching story! I enjoyed the onomatopoeia you used with the "THUMP," and the initial line which gives the reader insight to Ian's inner dialogue. I wonder if you considered putting these in quotation marks or making the font italicized? It would be great to see more of his thoughts more specifically, especially with a story like this where he and the dogs are the only characters really. I think it's great he was able to earn her trust in the end. Also, stopping here leaves the reader wondering and rooting for their relationship to grow!

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